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As an editor, I often follow this rule:
I’m also quite happy to follow copywriters’ rules and start sentences with “but” or “and” when it helps to break long, multi-clause sentences into more readable chunks.
So, when I see a sentence starting with “However,” I usually change it to start with “But.”
This can produce some unfortunate repetition, as an author today pointed out to me. Take this sentence:
Not all of these welfare recipients rely entirely on benefits—some combine benefits with an element of paid work—but nearly all are net tax beneficiaries who do not make a real contribution to the public purse. But come election time, as adults they are compelled to vote. (emphasis added)
This shows that while it’s good to have a clear set of rules to edit by, it’s also important to keep looking for places where breaking them makes the writing better.
Unless you’re correcting proofs, sometimes a reorganisation of the text is the best approach. For example, you could recast the final sentence: ‘Come election time, however, as adults they are compelled to vote’. (I can’t see which word you emphasised as the paragraph style has overridden the character style.)
I would argue that it’s better to have the right word than a short one, but this is certainly a good rule to apply to commercial or bureaucratic writing that contains too much jargon.
Hi, Penny. Thanks for commenting, and for pointing out the clashing paragraph and character styles. I’ll be back in Melbourne soon—we should catch up. It’s been a long time.